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What can be done to tackle this problem? There are three suggested solutions.The first is more vigorous education of the public on environmental protection,the damage littering causes to the environment in particular. The second is tofund more visible and convenient rubbish barrels for the tourists along thetourist routes. The third is to fine tourists for littering and award those whovoluntarily clean up the litter in tourist areas. Hopefully, these threemeasures can help reduce the tourists' littering.

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這幅圖上畫著一個人在劃船,船上的一對遊客一邊觀光,一邊將垃圾扔入湖中。水麵上已經有大量漂浮的垃圾。顯而易見,這對遊客正在效仿他人亂丟垃圾的行為。

我們從這幅圖畫中看到的是旅遊業令人擔心的景象。遊客的數量急劇增長,隨之而來的是遊客們不負責任丟棄的垃圾大量增加。為何會發生這種亂丟垃圾的事情?首先,很多遊客缺乏社會公德,而且有亂丟垃圾的習慣。環保意識對他們而言是相當模糊的概念。其次,景區的垃圾處理設施不足,公眾使用不便。

我們該如何解決這一問題呢?我有三個建議措施。首先是積極教育公眾保護環境,尤其是對於亂丟垃圾導致的環境破壞。其次是沿著旅遊線路,為遊客投資設置更多醒目和方便的垃圾桶。第三是處罰亂丟垃圾的遊客,同時獎勵那些主動在旅遊區清理垃圾的人。希望這三項措施能有助於減少遊客亂丟垃圾的行為。

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本文共三段、15句、216詞。首段是圖畫描述段,共三句,是“總—分—總”結構。首句是總體描述,點出“人物+動作+環境”,使用了現在分詞短語放在名詞後麵作定語、介詞短語放在名詞後麵作定語、定語從句、現在進行時、並列結構。次句進行細節描述,使用了倒裝句。尾句進行小結,采用了it作形式主語、主語從句、現在進行時。本段先後運用了portray, rowa boat, a couple of, tourist, throw litter, sightseeing, a large amount of, floatingtrash, it's apparent that, follow one's example等精彩表達。

第二段是意義闡釋段,共六句,是“總—分”結構。首句承上啟下,使用了主語從句、主係表結構、介詞短語放在名詞後麵作定語。次句說明現狀,使用了介詞短語作伴隨狀語、過去分詞短語放在名詞後麵作定語。第三句使用了設問的修辭手法。第四至六句給出兩點原因。第四至五句指出第一個原因:有些遊客缺乏社會公德。第四句運用了並列句,第五句出現了主係表結構。第六句指出第二個原因:垃圾回收設施不完善,使用了介詞短語放在名詞後麵作定語、主係表結構、並列結構、被動語態。本段依次使用了whatwe see from this, worrying picture, tourism, rise dramatically, together with, hugeincrease, the amount of,litter, irresponsibly disposed, lack socialmorality, environmental awareness,rather vague concept, facility, garbagedisposal, scenic area, the public等精彩表達。

尾段是建議措施段,共六句,是“總—分—總”結構。前兩句是主題句,再次使用了設問的修辭手法,運用了被動語態、過去分詞作定語。第三至五句提出三點建議:第三句提出建議一:環保教育,出現了主係表結構、介詞短語放在名詞後麵作定語、定語從句。第四句提出建議二:完善設施,出現了主係表結構、不定式短語作表語、平行排比、介詞短語放在句尾作狀語。第五句提出建議三:獎懲分明,使用了主係表結構、不定式短語作表語、並列結構、定語從句。尾句進行小結。全段先後出現了tacklethis problem,suggested solutions,vigorous education,environmentalprotection,damage,in particular,fund,visible and convenient,rubbish barrel,alongthe tourist routes,fine,award,voluntarily,clean up等精彩表達。

英語(二)

Part A

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Dear Li Ming,

I'm so glad to hear that you have received the offer from Beijing University.Congratulations! There's nothing surprising—I remember seeing how hard you havebeen working since childhood. Now you have the opportunity to learn physics,which you have a huge interest in, in one of the best universities in China. Ifeel extremely happy for you.

Well, I want to share some reminders for university life with you. First of all,don't forget your study. Second, take some time to know yourself well and makeyour own decisions. Third, enjoy your life as long as it's under your control. Ihope you will have a wonderful time.

Yours,

Zhang Wei

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李明:

很高興得知你收到了北京大學的錄取通知。祝賀你!我一點都不感到驚訝——我記得你自童年以來一直在努力地學習。現在你終於有機會在中國最好的大學之一學習物理學——你非常感興趣的專業。我為你感到格外高興。

下麵,我想和你分享一些大學生活的建議。首先,別忘了學習。其次,花點時間好好了解自己,並自己做決定。第三,隻要你能掌控,盡可能享受生活。希望你過得開心。

張偉

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該文很好地完成了試題的要求,既表達了祝賀又為收信人的大學生活提了三條建議。語言質量高;層次分明,表達流暢,銜接自然;措辭和語氣恰當,完全達到了寫作目的;結構豐富,用詞準確,詞彙量較大;語法錯誤極少;格式正確。本文得分9分。

Part B

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The chart above demonstrates clearly that some changes have taken place in termsof the car market of China. Based upon the data of the chart, one can see thatthe percentage of domestic cars has been on a rise, while the sales percentageof cars made in Japan has witnessed been on a decline. In the year of 2008, thepercentage of cars made in China was nearly 25%, while within no more than ayear, it went up to nearly 33%. The percentage of cars made in Japan was 35%,while it went down to 25% in 2009.

It's no difficulty for us to come up with some possible factors to account forthis trend. At the top of the list, with the rapid development of our economyand society, more and more people prefer civil products to foreign ones. It'sreported that, approximately 55% of families in Chinese big cities are foundcars made in China. In addition, we must admit that the government appeals to usto support our native industries. Last but not the least, the fact cannot beignored that, the cars made in China are increasingly qualified.

Taking into account what has been argued, we can come to the conclusion thatthis established trend is positive and therefore acceptable. And I am firmlycertain that this trend will continue in the years to come.

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上述圖表清晰顯示了在中國汽車市場上發生的一些變化。根據圖表中的數據,我們可以看到,國產汽車所占的百分比持續上升,而日係汽車的銷售百分比持續下降。在2008年,國產汽車所占百分比接近25%,而在不到一年的時間內,上升到了近33%。日係汽車所占百分比是35%,而在2009年下降到25%。

我們不難發現導致這種趨勢的一些可能的原因。首先,隨著我國經濟和社會的迅速發展,相比外國產品,越來越多的人更喜歡國產品牌。據報道,在中國的大城市大約55%的家庭喜歡國產汽車。此外,我們必須承認,政府也呼籲我們支持本國企業。最後,不容忽視的事實是,國產汽車的質量越來越好。

考慮到上述觀點,我們能夠得出結論:這一既定趨勢是積極的,因此可以接受。我堅信這一趨勢在未來幾年將會延續。

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該文很好地完成了試題規定的任務,內容完整。在描述圖表方麵,考生並不僅僅局限於數字本身,而是注意挖掘這些數字背後的規律,並對圖表中的具體數字進行總結和升華。在評論方麵,內容也比較全麵、中肯。總體來看,本文結構完整,語言比較流暢,措辭準確,用詞和句型結構有變化,無重大語法錯誤。另外,本文也靈活使用了各種銜接手段,內容連貫,前後照應,層次分明,易於理解。字數符合要求。本文得分14分。