七、2003年寫作真題高分作文及講解
高分作文
20分作文樣例
It goes without saying that the drawings aim at revealing a common and seriousproblem in China? how to educate and cultivate the young. Let's take a closerlook at the drawings. In an ideal condition， the flower blooms. But when movedout of the greenhouse， it perishes under the rain and storm. It is obvious thatthe flower in greenhouse can't withstand wind and rain.
Nowadays the younger generation in China， like the flower in the greenhouse，live under the full protection from their parents. Parents want to show alltheir love to their children. They give their children all the best things theycan afford and do _disibledevent=some books， 更加書麵化），shelves， out ofdate， latest magazines等精彩表達。美中不足的是，由於圖書館的本職工作就是改進服務，作者不應使用greatlyhonored（非常榮幸），應將其改為very pleased.
尾段共兩句。首句再次重申寫作目的，即希望對方改進服務，與首段前後呼應。比較級morecomfortable的運用使得語氣更加委婉。尾句第三次表示感謝，使得通篇文章的語域恰如其分。
總之，本文雖然用詞簡單，但構思相當精彩，充分滿足了高分作文的要求——語言精彩、結構嚴謹、不跑題，因此取得當年最高分是實至名歸。相反，2007年大量考生盲目使用難詞、難句，但語氣生硬，通篇責備圖書館，缺少感謝，使文體變成了投訴信，與題目要求南轅北轍。還有些考生隻提建議，沒有原因；或隻說問題，沒有建議，從而造成得分較低。
Part B
高分作文
As we can see from the picture， a football match is going on. On guarding thedoor， the left man seems to be keeping a "huge door" that is easy and inevitablefor a goal， while the right person hesitates to kick the ball with an illusionabout the "huge door keeper". It is obvious that both of them exaggerate thedifficulties in front of them.
This photo does reflect a thought-provoking social phenomenon which is notuncommon in China now. The young always give up because the problem is beyondtheir ability to cope with. Superficially， it seems to be somewhat reasonable，but when weighing in the mind， we find there is an apparent tendency underlyingthis phenomenon： the lack of confidence. Firstly， it is well-known that we existin a dynamic world with various difficulties. We can do nothing but face them.Secondly， attitude is the key point to take the first step. Assume bravery andconfidence to solve the problem， you will find the question is not as "huge" asyou imagine. Take us for example， the entrance exam for graduate students evenseems to a horrible monster before us. Some people give up， some persist. So，with confidence and the right assessment of the difficulties， try and exert yourstrength， and then we will overcome all problems.